Kitely welcome area: What information? How to provide it?

[Dot Matrix]

Agree -- using "time" rather than "hours" or "minutes" is better.

I'd possibly change the last line on personal plans to: "Monthly upgrades that provide you with more time inworld and more hosted worlds ..." ("and" rather than "or" since the plans give both). I'd also change the / to "per".

[Dot Matrix]

For completeness and convenience, here's the text for the two types of plans with all the currently agreed edits in place:

Business Plans
Pay a fixed cost per month to host a world so everyone can enter that world for free. This option is comparable to how you would pay to have land in Second Life or other OpenSim-based grids - you pay a fixed cost regardless of how many people use your virtual land.

Personal Plans
Host a world for free with the personal plan. Travel anywhere throughout Kitely with your monthly free time allowance.
Monthly upgrades that provide you with more time inworld and more hosted worlds are available from just $5 per month.

Could the text for the business plans be further shortened without making it less accurate? Perhaps:

Business Plans
Pay a fixed cost per month to host a world that everyone can enter for free. This option is comparable to how you pay for land in Second Life - a fixed cost regardless of how many people use it.

[Dot Matrix]

And even shorter:

Business Plans
Pay a fixed cost per month to host a world everyone can enter for free. This is like how you pay for land in Second Life - a fixed cost no matter how many people use it.

[Constance Peregrine]

Even shorter...

Business Plan

Buy this

Personal Plan

or buy this

hey, just tryin' to be helpful ya know....

[Allen Partridge]

Or ...

"Either host a world for a fixed monthly cost that everyone can use for free, OR create a world for free, that requires visitors to share the cost in minutes."

Can we break it down further? Can we come up with visual imagery that clarifies.

--Allen

[Dot Matrix]

Or ...

"Either host a world for a fixed monthly cost that everyone can use for free, OR create a world for free, that requires visitors to share the cost in minutes."

Can we break it down further? Can we come up with visual imagery that clarifies.

Sorry, Allen, but I find the split into business and personal plans more helpful and straightforward than combining the two hosting payment methods into a single message that then needs quite a bit of clarification.

It's a question of needing to KISS (where SS = Simple and Straightforward), given the lack of time before the KWC Stage 1 needs to go live (5 September). The clever stuff for Stage 2 can then be worked on without the pressure of a near-impossible deadline.

So could we try to refine the following suggestions to develop two attractive signs which can be clicked for further information -- in a sense, in doing that the users make the choice implied by the combined message.

Business Plans
Pay a fixed cost per month to host a world everyone can enter for free. This is like how you pay for land in Second Life - a fixed cost no matter how many people use it.

Personal Plans
Host a world for free with the personal plan. Travel anywhere throughout Kitely with your monthly free time allowance.
Monthly upgrades that provide you with more time inworld and more hosted worlds are available from just $5 per month.

A third sign, not yet discussed in detail, needs to cover how to create a world. I'll set up a separate thread for that so that the discussion here can keep focused on the different payment plans.